I’m not finished with the scene. The phone call at the end is the phone call that starts the action in the first script. I’ve heard from several people that starting with the phone call is not the way to go, so I’m taking their suggestions to heart and trying something new.
(pages 13,14 & 15)
EXT. SAM’S HOUSE – NIGHT
The Taxi Driver pulls into the driveway of a large Victorian style home.
INT. TAXI – CONTINUOUS
TAXI DRIVER
Yo, my man, you rich?
There is no response.
TAXI DRIVER
YO!
The Taxi Driver turns and sees that Sam is passed out.
TAXI DRIVER
Shit!
EXT. TAXI – CONTINUOUS
The Taxi Driver exits his taxi and goes to the back door. He opens it and reaches in.
INT. TAXI – CONTINUOUS
The Taxi Driver lightly slaps Sam in the face, but Sam doesn’t wake up. So the Driver slaps a couple of more times and keeps slapping harder each time. Sam is unwavering.
TAXI DRIVER
Are you fucking kidding me?
The Taxi Driver climbs out of the car.
EXT. SAM’S HOUSE – CONTINUOUS
The Taxi Driver climbs the front porch and rings the doorbell. No one answers. He rings again. Again nothing.
INT. TAXI – CONTINUOUS
The Taxi Driver starts rummaging through Sam’s pockets until he finds the keys. As he exits, he drags Sam out with him.
EXT. TAXI – CONTINUOUS
The Taxi Drivers slings Sam over his shoulder fireman style and carries him to the house.
The Driver gets to the door and tries three different keys until he finds the right one.
TAXI DRIVER
Man, I hope you don’t have an alarm system.
INT. SAM’S HOUSE – CONTINUOUS
The Driver carries Sam in. He sees the couch in the living room and it looks too small and uncomfortable. He looks at the stairs leading up to the second floor.
TAXI DRIVER
I’m taking an extra big tip for this.
He starts climbing the stairs.
INT. SAM’S BEDROOM – CONTINUOUS
The Taxi Driver places Sam on the bed and removes his shoes.
The Driver starts rummaging through Sam’s pockets until he finds Sam’s wallet. He opens it and there’s several hundred dollars in it. The driver pulls out three twenties and puts it on Sam’s nightstand.
The Driver goes to exit the bedroom and stops. He returns to the wallet, opens it and takes all the money. He exits the bedroom.
Sam stirs in his bed and wakes up. He notices his surroundings and realizes he’s home. He climbs out of bed and staggers towards the bathroom attached to the room.
INT. BATHROOM – CONTINUOUS
Sam races towards the toilet and throws up. He finishes and flushes.
Sam goes to the sink and runs the water. He washes his face and rinses out his mouth. He finishes and turns off the water. When he raises his head from the sink, the Woman from his office earlier is standing behind him. She grabs Sam’s head with her left hand pulling it back to expose his neck and uses her right hand to slice his throat with the scalpel.
Sam clutches his throat and falls backwards into the shower, bring down the curtains with him. Blood is spurting everywhere and the Woman is gone.
INT. SAM’S BEDROOM – CONTINUOUS
Sam wakes up gasping for air and clutching his throat. His breathing rate quickens as he continues to suck in air. He looks around the room.
The phone rings, startling him.
Sam lets it ring several seconds before he answers.
I like this – love the taxi driver as what is often a throwaway character makes a moral decision – great moment. And the woman is well done. good stuff.
Thank you. Should I still add her in the bar? Or does she appear soon enough?