Pages sixty-four, sixty-five, sixty-six and sixty-seven.

Here’s a link to an article about rewriting. I’ll go back to it when I’m finished with the draft.

I’m not sure if the scene below is finished or not. It feels unfinished, but I’m not sure what I should add to it. So I’ll just leave it open in case I think of something in the next day or so.

(Pages 64, 65, 66 & 67)
INT. CAR – NIGHT

Martin is driving his car. In the back seat are Dino and Sherry. Dino
is passed out and Sherry is tending to his face.

Martin looks back in the mirror.

SHERRY
Shouldn’t we take him to the hospital?

MARTIN
He’ll be fine. It’s the drug making him sleep.

SHERRY
What did you give him?

MARTIN
Sodium pentothal. The truth serum.

SHERRY
Really? That’s real?

MARTIN
The drug is real. The effects are often questioned. Some don’t think it works and others do.

SHERRY
What do you think?

MARTIN
I think it works on some people and not on others.

SHERRY
Do you think it worked on Dino?

MARTIN
If I didn’t, he’d be dead right now.

Sherry runs her hand over Dino’s face. She lightly slaps him. Dino doesn’t respond.

SHERRY
Do you have any water?

MARTIN
Yeah.

Martin hands her a water bottle.

Sherry pours some water in her hands and splashes it on Dino.

MARTIN
You should let him sleep. He’s not going to feel too good for the next
few days.

Sherry ignores him and pours more water on Dino’s face. This time Dino reacts.

DINO
Mmmmm. Mmmmm. What?

SHERRY
Get up, honey.

DINO
What? What?

SHERRY
Wake up, I want to talk to you.

DINO
I’m up.

SHERRY
Do you love me?

DINO
Of course I love you. Why would you ask me that?

SHERRY
I just needed to know.

Sherry strokes Dino’s face some more. She kisses him.

SHERRY
Do you love your wife?

DINO
Yeah, I love my wife. What’s going on here?

SHERRY
Do you plan on leaving her for me?

DINO
It’s moot. She left me.

SHERRY
If she didn’t leave you, would you have left her for me?

DINO
No. I don’t think I could’ve.

SHERRY
Then why were you with me? Why did you keep telling me you were going to leave her?

DINO
Because I didn’t want you to leave me.

Sherry starts tearing up.

SHERRY
So it was okay for me to be with a man that was never going to leave his wife.

DINO
I don’t know what you want me to say.

SHERRY
The truth, asshole! I just want the truth!

DINO
The truth? The truth is I only need you when I want to fuck. It’s not rocket science. What else do I need you for? I already have a wife.

Sherry turns away.

DINO
What? Now you’re upset? Jesus, that’s why you can’t be honest with anyone. No one wants the truth. What’s the difference? I’m with you now anyways. Isn’t that whats important?

SHERRY
I wish it was. I wish it was.

DINO
What’s that mean?

MARTIN
Hey, Dino?

DINO
What?

MARTIN
Shut up and go back to sleep.

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  1. Its excellent as your other content : D, thanks for posting . “It takes less time to do things right than to explain why you did it wrong.” by Henry Wadsworth Longfellow.

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